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I wonder how this article would have been written if it occurred in a different state? You don't find out until the 3rd paragraph that the manager "...was bleeding from gunshot wounds when he stumbled back to his home" I assume that means the "teenage boy" might have been doing a little more than spiting in his face.

The video next to the article talks of "his youth and talent gone in a burst of violence...". Although the video also mentions the manager was shot, it doesn't say where the bullets came from.

http://wcbstv.com/topstories/local_story_316183306.html


(CBS) NEW YORK A Burger King restaurant manager is being charged with shooting a teenage boy dead the two argued, and the boy spit in the manager's face.

Police say 16-year-old Shaka Walcott and 45-year-old Ronald Johannes had been arguing for more than a week. Police say the teenager returned to the Bronx Burger King Saturday night and was shot several times in the chest by the manager.

Witnesses say Johannes also was injured in the fight and he left the scene while the teen-ager writhed on the ground. Police say Walcott was taken to a hospital, where he was pronounced dead. They said Johannes was bleeding from gunshot wounds when he stumbled back to his home, where they arrested him.

Johannes is charged with murder, manslaughter and criminal possession of a weapon.

Customers at the Burger King, however, said Johannes was difficult to deal with and used to kick them out.

Police say 16-year-old Shaka Walcott and 45-year-old Ronald Johannes had been arguing for more than a week. Police say the teenager returned to the Bronx Burger King Saturday night and was shot ...

It sounds like he asked for it, whether or not it was a justifiable homicide. Sloppy reporting, in any case.

- Jim

Besides the obvious lack of information and bias, is anyone else as amazed as I that such poor grammar is actually published in newspapers these days?

A Burger King restaurant manager is being charged with shooting a teenage boy dead the two argued, and the boy spit in the manager's face.

What?

Witnesses say Johannes also was injured in the fight and he left the scene while the teen-ager writhed on the ground.

A comma is required between the two independent clauses and after a coordinating conjunction.

It is also a poorly structured sentence. Teenager is one word, not hyphenated.

Police say Walcott was taken to a hospital, where he was pronounced dead.

The comma is not needed.

I realize that in posting and informal writing we all may make these mistakes; however, this was written by a professional journalist and edited.

txinvestigator wrote:Besides the obvious lack of information and bias, is anyone else as amazed as I that such poor grammar is actually published in newspapers these days?

Maybe that's how New Yorkers write.

KinnyLee wrote:

txinvestigator wrote:Besides the obvious lack of information and bias, is anyone else as amazed as I that such poor grammar is actually published in newspapers these days?

Maybe that's how New Yorkers write.

I can attest to the contrary.

However, as I progress in my years it seems that I was fortunate to have moved to the south, as my views would not nearly be so acceptable in NY. Except maybe Upstate in the mountains, which is probably where I'd live anyway.

email them in their contacts page... tell them how bias they were and about their poor use of the English language and sentence structure.

I did.

txinvestigator wrote:Besides the obvious lack of information and bias, is anyone else as amazed as I that such poor grammar is actually published in newspapers these days?

It was a TV news site. Television reporters write in a different format for broadcast, and interns get tasked to re-write stories for the website.

A few years ago, I stopped by to visit my old Journalism professor, just in time to catch the live broadcast of the campus cable news program. They were a student short, so I was "volunteered" to run the switcher. The students looked at me with big eyes when the professor told them I'd written the newscast script they were following, more than 15 years earlier.

He didn't tell them that I hadn't touched a switcher since then. It all worked out, though.

Kevin

[/quote]Maybe that's how New Yorkers write. [/quote]



I thought it was "Yute", not teenager.


Yankee's!

No comment.

Just as the news story made no comment on the Burger King manager's gunshot wounds. We have to trust the law enforcement officers on this one.

But the journalism is biased and poorly written. Thank goodness I don't live in New York.

Kevin: you rock.

There's a little more info in the New York Times article, but it's still unclear how the shooting happened or who fired first.
Either way, Mr. Johannes was extremely foolish to accept the invitation to take it to the parking lot.